tankas, a form of Japanese poetry
I wrote this for a forum on tankas, (a form of Japanese poetry that has a 5,7,5,7,7 count) but I was kicked out of the forum for insulting someone who insulted someone else, but that’s what I get, I wouldn’t let my students get away with it so why should I expect to. Anyway, now I’ll just post it here.
A work in progress
The first daffodil
Bloomed last week in my dad’s yard
If it weren’t alone
I would have picked it for sure
More will come so I will wait
Beautiful flower
Bright yellow in winter’s grey
Brimming with sunshine
This cold January day
Singing, “Spring is on its way”
I’m trying to stop rhyming
One single flower
With a great task before it
A scout, forerunner
Breaking ground, clearing the way
Bringing hope of warmer days
I’m bundled up tight
Against winter’s frosty air
A daffodil blooms
All I do is stare at it
I’d forgotten about spring
I’m trying to stop speaking in phrases/sentences too, which is hard because I spent yesterday morning correcting papers. I’ll be seeing capitalization, comas, ending marks, and run on sentences in my sleep for days.
I’m trying to stop
I’m trying to not write rhyme
I’m trying to stop
Stop writing in short phrases
But it happens every time
Maybe I have a poetic handicap
Beautiful yellow
Background of grey, brown and dull
Snags my attention
Image imprinted … still
Ray of hope, I remember
Durn, I thought I’d never that thing out
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